So, my ELA teacher is making us write a story as a subplot for The Masque Of The Red Death, and I don't know what to think of what I have so far. If you could, please read it in the link provided and post your criticisms and remarks here. DO NOT try to sugarcoat it please!

The Story

Thanks! ^^

Keep in mind I will be working on it as you read

Originally Posted by Myik (Post 423959) You need to click share, then get sharable link so we can see it.

Originally Posted by Raven hollow (Post 423950) We need to ask to see it

Originally Posted by Myik (Post 423959) You need to click share, then get sharable link so we can see it.

Originally Posted by Myik (Post 423971) Did you add the new link? Still won't work for me

Originally Posted by Mayflower (Post 423991) I did add the new link. It should be right here

Originally Posted by Akari (Post 423994) Hm, It's looking pretty good so far. Don't forget to Indent the First Word, as it Seems you forgot to do that. "Ciraynne herself wasn’t in as gay a mood as the others, seeing as she was still homesick." Can you elaborate what you mean by a "Gay Mood" ? @Mayflower