I need some advice
Ok, so I'm writing poems for each of my friends, and I just finished one for one of my friends. I call her 'Rain Child' because she hates the rain. Anyway, I'd like some advice on this poem:
Rain Child Check the time, Where did it all go? Time doesn’t exist, When hanging out with you Laughing, You never mind my dirty jokes And my light-hearted teasing is fine here Especially when talking about your crush Remember when we were walking to the bus, Out in the rain that you hate And I gave you the nickname, Rain Child? Well, here we are, Rain Child With a friendship that can weather any storm That comes our way |
Re: I need some advice (Poem)
@The Mad Katter (clever) I don’t now know if you still want advice on this or not but here goes. I like it and I know poetry has many different rules for writing and it allows the poet to experiment with many different forms and styles of speech. As I was reading I can normally make a rhythm fit but I don’t know if it’s just my brain at 8:00 in the morning or what but I can’t seem to find one. Also, when it says “With a friendship that can weather any storm...” I’m not sure if you used the wrong “weather” or if you were making a pun or something but it should be “whether” (unless you were making a pun, then very clever!) Sincerly, ScarredSecrets~ |
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