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Originally Posted by Mayflower

@Myik

Thank you for the criticism! I'll make sure to fix the pregnancy sickness thing, and the capitalization is just because i'm typing fast and google docs doesn't immediately chane it. I'm planning on going through and fixing it after I finish the story.

Myik, could you please elaborate on grammar errors? You don't need to quote the story or anything, but what you noticed would be nice so I can fix it. As for the romance story, I didn't really elaborate because if I did the story would be extra long haha ^^ . But I also had it shorter because I believe in the medieval era, around where this story is set, marriage was often rushed into and not prolonged. Some people wouldn't even meet and still get married. But I understand if you think it's rushed.

As for the brother, I'm planning on adding a bit of drama when he notices something's up with Alistair and then finds out they were engaged and Ciraynne is pregnant.

Akari picked out one thing, but it's not anything I can really suggest? I just see a few sentences with no spaces, but it seems like you have that under control since almost all of them are fixed.
I get the timeline, and I see it but still, I would just like to see them together more. Talking more and falling in love. Back then they still did that, the only true reason people got married quickly was because they died quickly. But, I see how you wanted it to be shorter.