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Old November 19th, 2017, 12:33 PM
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Default Re: Story criticism!

Here's a Suggestion! I Saw you Typed: “Alistair, there’s no guarantee it’s male. I was thinking of Maurice or Leo for a boy, and Adeline or Fleur.”
After the name Fleur, You should probably add in "for a girl.", or " If it turns out to be a girl. "

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