Reviewing Your OCs

[Sklee]

Aw! Thanks! I think I just didn't clarify enough on the backstory, and for the record, She might become a leader? If she survives long enough? Idk I know she would be a good leader, so? But, She did not have a collar on, this how they were able to escape. She never met her mom because her mom thought that she couldn't take good enough care of her, so Dingo was supposed to take her to another kittypet he knew, but her two-legs had moved. Also, sorry for including those parts. I didn't know I was supposed to take those off. Those were clan cats that had been captured by two-legs, just for the record.
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Full Naming History: BarleyKit, BarleyPaw, BarleyGrowl

Name Reasoning: Barley: His sprites color,Growl: He hissing and fighting.

Gender: Tom Cat

Affiliation History: Windclan,Starclan.

Rank History: Windclan-Kit, Windclan-Appertince, Windclan-Warrior, Windclan-Senior Warrior, Starclan

Age: 6.5 moons right now.

Appearance: White with ginger stripes and green eyes.

Body Type: Lean and slim

Fur Type: short

Fur Coloring: White and ginger.

Eye Detail: N/A

Eye Coloring: Green

Scars/Deformities: His left ear was torn off.

Other: N/A

Personality: Anger but normaly calm,he has a short temper and he likes to help cats older then him,but he hates cats younger than him.

Backstory: When Windclaw was in windclan,she was expecting kits.her mate Rio had left her to be a kittypet. She couldnt be exiled and have kits so she abandoned them him in the moor. Barleykit was brought to windclan and is about to become an appertince right now.

Likes:
Rabbit
Thrush
Fighting

Dislikes:
Climbing
Hunting
Patrols

Strengths:
Speed
Strength
Fighting

Weaknesses:
Hunting
Climbing

Family: WindClaw,Rio.

Mother: WindClaw

Naming History:WindKit,WindPaw, Windclaw.

Reason for Names:Wind:Her speed, Claw: Her savagery

Appearance:White with ginger stripes and ginger paws she has green eyes.

Body Type: slim and lean

Fur Type: short

Fur Coloring: White with ginger stripes and ginger paws.

Eye Detail: N/A

Eye Coloring: Green

Scars/Deformities: N/A

Other: N/A

Personality: Angered by every thing and hates her kits,she left windclan because was exiled for killing her brother.She hates everyone.

Relationship With Your Character: Hates her because she adonbon him.

Father: Rio

Naming History: BlueKit, BluePaw, Blueheart, Rio

Reason for Names: His blue fur, Kittypet Name: He looks lke the movie Bird.

Appearance: Blue-grey tom with amber eyes

Body Type: Slim

Fur Type: Really Fuffy like feathers

Fur Coloring: Blue grey with grey underbelly.

Eye Detail: N/A

Eye Coloring: Amber

Scars/Deformities:3 claw marks Across his face

Other: N/A

Personality: Sweet,he is calm. but if under pressure he cracks. When he was appertince he was clawed in a battle,he earns his warrior name he leaves windclan to become a kittypet.

Relationship With Your Character: He hasnt ever meet him.

Siblings: N/A

Extra: N/A

Mate: N/A

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finally im done!

[TheNyanCatMinecart]

@Sklee

Okay, thanks for the clarification!

@Cougar

I'll get started soon!

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i'll right!

[Vixenstar]

Can I do a cat that's not on WCO? @TheNyanCatMinecart

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@Azzi

Of course!

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@Cougar

Full Naming History: BarleyKit, BarleyPaw, BarleyGrowl

I like the prefix Barley-! It's unique and I don't see it very often. -growl is an unusual suffix as well but would make sense for a Clan cat. Overall, this name is very unique and I like it a lot.

Name Reasoning: Barley: His sprites color,Growl: He hissing and fighting.

These are good reasons. Normally, cats are named for their fur, and the stripes that would look like barley stalks make sense for his prefix. The suffix and the reasoning for it is very creative; his fighting abilities and his signature loud hiss, which I'm assuming he was named for, would give him that suffix. Good job!

Gender: Tom Cat

Okay, nice.

Affiliation History: Windclan,Starclan.

So, he's a WindClan cat? That's cool! And it's nice to know that he gets to go to StarClan when he dies.

Rank History: Windclan-Kit, Windclan-Appertince, Windclan-Warrior, Windclan-Senior Warrior, Starclan

Cool! It's nice to know that he's able to reach the rank of a senior warrior before dying and joining StarClan.

Age: 6.5 moons right now.

Okay. Since he's a roleplay character, it makes sense that his age wouldn't fully be planned out. Thank you for telling me his current age.

Appearance: White with ginger stripes and green eyes.

I said this before, but you aren't supposed to tell me what he looks like here. The "Appearance" is general. You're supposed to tell me using the form below. But alright. I like the ginger stripes, but I will let you know that barley is actually a light yellow-brown plant. Did the straightness of his stripes remind his mother of barley stalks or was it the color? If it was the color, then I'd recommend changing it to be more barley-colored.

Body Type: Lean and slim

Cool! This is a good body type for a WindClan cat and also a body type that I don't see for toms all that often.

Fur Type: short

Again, it's good how you were consistent with how WindClan cats look! They tend to have short fur and are the least used to wetness and water, so that's nice. Also, the short fur looks good on him.

Fur Coloring: White and ginger.

Okay. You mentioned this above, so I won't comment on this here.

Eye Detail: N/A

Okay, so his eyes are normal.

Eye Coloring: Green

Scars/Deformities: His left ear was torn off.

Ooh, cool design! It shows the sign of warrior life and it looks cool as well. If his whole left ear is torn off, then is he deaf there? I'd recommend thinking about that because, as revealed in Squirrelflight's Hope, if you tear too deep into an ear, then you can no longer here from it. I like this, though!

Other: N/A

Personality: Anger but normaly calm,he has a short temper and he likes to help cats older then him,but he hates cats younger than him.

This is a bit of an odd personality, but I like where you're going with it. I think that, when you say "angry but normally calm," you're referring to him having a short temper, but managing it rather well unless he's aggravated. At least, that's what I'm assuming. If not, then maybe think about that. I wonder why he hates cats younger than him. Does he find them annoying or useless? It's cute how he likes to help those older than him, though. That's a cute trait to have!

Backstory: When Windclaw was in windclan,she was expecting kits.her mate Rio had left her to be a kittypet. She couldnt be exiled and have kits so she abandoned them him in the moor. Barleykit was brought to windclan and is about to become an appertince right now.

I was about to say that this was confusing, but I think that I get it now. So, Windclaw had a mate who was leaving the Clan and she didn't want to be exiled, so she took them and left them on the moor in the hopes that WindClan would find them. That's a very interesting and unique plotline! However, you don't have a lot about Barleykit. I understand that he's a roleplay character, but you have done some roleplaying with him. He's also becoming an apprentice late, but that happens a lot with roleplay characters. So, what is life in WindClan like? How does he live with the thought that cats think that he's a loner or a rogue? I'd recommend adding on more about Barleykit's actual life, but again, this is a good start. It's fairly unique and I love it!

Likes:
Rabbit
Thrush
Fighting

Okay, that's nice. Thrushes aren't normally found on WindClan, so are they a rare delicacy to him? But anyway, him liking to fight is consistent with his personality, so good job. And it makes sense why he likes rabbits since he's in WindClan.

Dislikes:
Climbing
Hunting
Patrols

Although I do like how these likes are balanced with the dislikes, I'm a bit confused about the climbing aspect. Unless WindClan claims ShadowClan's territory in the upcoming plot, WindClan cats wouldn't have to climb, so he wouldn't really have the chance to experience it. Unless you mean stuff like climbing rocks and whatnot. It's really interesting how he doesn't like patrols; that's rare for a cat and I like it! Disliking hunting is a bit odd, especially for a warrior cat, but he does prefer fighting. So, I like that aspect. Overall, these are very unique and I like them!

Strengths:
Speed
Strength
Fighting

It's good that a WindClan cat is speedy, and again, it's good that he's strong because you're staying consistent with him. Same with the fighting. Nice.

Weaknesses:
Hunting
Climbing

Okay. These are consistent.

Family: WindClaw,Rio.

Again, you don't label them right here.

Mother: WindClaw

Naming History:WindKit,WindPaw, Windclaw.

It's a bit odd how a cat from WindClan has the prefix Wind-, but otherwise, I do like this name. It's fairly unique and a bit unusual for a she-cat. Nice job!

Reason for Names:Wind:Her speed, Claw: Her savagery

I'll just say that you can't really determine the speed of a kit. Like, they're named a couple or a few days after birth, maybe even right after birth. Maybe she had a lithe body type even when she was young, which hinted at her speed, or her pelt had stripes or something that made it look like it was constantly moving. The reasoning for her suffix is good, though. I don't see savagery for she-cats too often!

Appearance:White with ginger stripes and ginger paws she has green eyes.

Okay. So, she looks like her son, just a bit different. Nice job, but if you have Barleygrowl change in design, then maybe alter her a bit as well. When I mentioned the stripes, a cool design pattern for her would be her stripes to swirl around her white pelt, creating the affect of wind. However, that's just a suggestion. I like her design otherwise.

Body Type: slim and lean

Okay, so she has the same body type as her son.

Fur Type: short

Nice. I'm curious, though... wouldn't the Clan see some resemblance between her and Barleykit? You don't have to change anything, and I know that he's a roleplay character, but I'm just curious.

Fur Coloring: White with ginger stripes and ginger paws.

Eye Detail: N/A

Eye Coloring: Green

Scars/Deformities: N/A

Maybe she could have some, especially if she's supposed to be fierce and vicious.

Other: N/A

Personality: Angered by every thing and hates her kits,she left windclan because was exiled for killing her brother.She hates everyone.

Oh, wow. That's a mood... and also very interesting. A recommendation for her character plot would be that, after Rio left her, she might feel angry and betrayed, and that's why she hates her kits. Maybe her brother learned her secret, so she killed him to silence him, but got exiled. However, these are all just recommendations for a fierce cat to go haywire. I like this personality - it's not something that you normally see in a she-cat. Good job!

Relationship With Your Character: Hates her because she adonbon him.

That's realistic.

Father: Rio

Naming History: BlueKit, BluePaw, Blueheart, Rio

Interesting how he was once in WindClan, I think. Blueheart isn't a name that I see too often, so that's cool! Rio is also a nice name. It reminds me of that movie (Rio) about the blue birds, actually. Anyway, these are all cool names.

Reason for Names: His blue fur, Kittypet Name: He looks lke the movie Bird.

Okay, that's a good reason, although I'm curious about the suffix -heart. Maybe it has something to do with his personality. Oh, and he does look like that blue thing from Rio. Cool!

Appearance: Blue-grey tom with amber eyes

Cute! Good on you for making him blue-gray and not literally blue, or else that would be weird. The amber eyes look really good on his design, so nice job!

Body Type: Slim

Nice. He was from WindClan, so that makes sense.

Fur Type: Really Fuffy like feathers

So, he looks like a bird? That's really cute.

Fur Coloring: Blue grey with grey underbelly.

Oh, so he has a colored underbelly? Nice. That looks good on him.

Eye Detail: N/A

Eye Coloring: Amber

Scars/Deformities:3 claw marks Across his face

Super cool! It shows the warrior lifestyle.

Other: N/A

Personality: Sweet,he is calm. but if under pressure he cracks. When he was appertince he was clawed in a battle,he earns his warrior name he leaves windclan to become a kittypet.

Aw, that's cute. I wonder how he got into a relationship with a fierce cat like Windclaw. I think that he left the Clans because he thought that Clan life was too harsh for him? That's what I'm thinking. But anyway, I really like this personality.

Relationship With Your Character: He hasnt ever meet him.

Makes sense.

Siblings: N/A

Extra: N/A

Mate: N/A

These all make sense! Overall, Barleygrowl is a really interesting character who could just use a bit of development in certain areas, mainly his backstory and appearance. Otherwise, though, I really like him! You can send over the KK when you're ready.

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