Constructive Criticism

[Willow_Tree]

So, I’ve been working on the world-building for my book for around . . . 2-3 years, and I think I’be filled any holes or inconsistencies. However, I would really appreciate some feedback, as I am hoping to have it published by the end of the summer. So, would anyone like to offer some constructive criticism?

Update: I am still adding to the Terminology section.

Update: Added the Lore

The World building

[JusticeRabbit]

:0 i love it so far!

[Willow_Tree]

Originally Posted by Don't Panic

:0 i love it so far!

Thank you! I’ve been working really hard on it.

[Courage]

great, but theres a small thing. You said they can only comunicate through body language and telepathy. you also said on thier naming ceromony they announce thier new name. if they cant talk how do they anounce thier new name? @WingedShadow

[Willow_Tree]

Originally Posted by Courage

great, but theres a small thing. You said they can only comunicate through body language and telepathy. you also said on thier naming ceromony they announce thier new name. if they cant talk how do they anounce thier new name? @WingedShadow

They do the Naming Ceremony in their human form. Only adults can leave the flock unattended, and so they show their human forms during the Naming Ceremony do their flock members can recognize them if they have to use it again.

Thank you for pointing that out, I’ll add it to the doc.

[Courage]

oh that makes sense! I love how well though out this is! @WingedShadow

[Willow_Tree]

Originally Posted by Courage

oh that makes sense! I love how well though out this is! @WingedShadow

Thank you! As I said before, I’ve been working on this for about 3 years, so I’m really hoping it’s all good.