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Originally Posted by Blizzardfang
Name; Shadewave
Age; 20 moons
Pronouns; She/her
Appearance; (No Links!!!) black she cat with electric blue eyes
Unique Traits; she is more like a Tom than a She-cat
Roleplay Sample; Shadewave stalks behind the rabbit, waiting for the right moment to pounce. The rabbit hears something and starts running. Shadewave grins and sprints after the rabbit. She catches up to it and pounces on it. She pins it and kills with a swift claw at the throat. Feeling satisfied, she takes the rabbit back to camp.
Anything Else; She has a horrible past.
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Hhh.. would you be able to use more descriptive words and longer, more structured sentences? Using such short sentences creates a bored, monotone sound to the roleplay.